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fic for lonelybusiness 
7th-Jul-2008 01:54 am
OH YEAR!!
Title: Sweet Plum Wine
Rating: NC-17
Threesome: Kame/Yamapi/Jin
Summary: “Are we friends, or are we not? / You told me once, but I forgot / Tell me now, and tell me true…”
Warnings: Rampant abuse of quotes, ridiculous emotionalism, random author pontification, unhappy sex…
Notes: I hope you enjoy lonelybusiness! Thanks to sollasollew11 for an amazing beta job! Any coherency or subtlety in this is completely her doing!

( Sweet Plum Wine )
Comments 
7th-Jul-2008 05:37 pm (UTC)
I loved this :( I love your style, the way we get an insight into all three characters heads. I love how they're so complex, so confused and unsure of each other. I especially love the way you developed Kamepi's relationship and how Yamapi started off 'hating' Kame but slowly realised he felt something more. I love your jealous!Jin, how Yamapi is aware that Kame is 'his' but for once he's willing to fight Jin for him.

I also loved your KAT-TUN dynamics, the way that they aren't the best of friends but they look after one another in the ways that count.

I really enjoyed this ♥ ♥
15th-Jul-2008 01:54 am (UTC)
thank you! *is so so flattered*

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

figuring out a workable threesome damn near killed me :)
7th-Jul-2008 07:16 pm (UTC)
This was brilliant. Brilliant.
15th-Jul-2008 01:56 am (UTC)
thank you!


and thank you for the rec as well!

I'm glad you thought it was a worthwhile read!

<3
8th-Jul-2008 05:38 am (UTC)
I love your writing style, it flows with the mood and story very well.
Thank You!
15th-Jul-2008 01:56 am (UTC)
thank you!

I'm glad you liked it! :)


8th-Jul-2008 01:40 pm (UTC)
It´s amazing!! Thanks!!! love it!
15th-Jul-2008 01:57 am (UTC)
your welcome and thank you!

15th-Jul-2008 01:57 am (UTC)
*facepalm*

you're
8th-Jul-2008 04:44 pm (UTC)
WOW THAT WAS GREAT! Thank you so much. I love every bit of it, especially minute details about KAT-TUN's life, and how you weave three points of view together. Juts LOVE this fic!
15th-Jul-2008 01:58 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad the details weren't too clogging!

:)
9th-Jul-2008 06:20 pm (UTC)
If they were salarymen, they would probably cover for each other if one of them was stealing office supplies and not invite each other out for drinks afterward.
it might just be a perfect description.

It's like they're just skimming the surface and Jin can't help but wish they would fall through.
i like the image.

Bastard didn't even taken his shoes off.
heh

He actually looks like a pop star; no one could get away dressing like this unless they were famous.
*snerk* lovely, lovely idk what to call it, snarky self-commentary, i suppose. commentary about an industry, society, world. something like that.

Pi types the text with no intention of ever sending it.

He makes sure to include seizure-inducing flashing graphics and gratuitous emoji. When he names Kamenashi's favorite restaurant in Shinjuku, he writes it in antiquated kanji that he knows Kamenashi will never be able to read. He attaches a random picture of the inside of his shoe, so large it would take ten minutes to load if it didn't crash Kamenashi's phone. Pi asks his manager for Kamenashi's schedule for accuracy's sake. Then, he types in a masturbating cat emoji that Ryo sent him. To finish, Pi punches in a last "~~chuuuuu ;*~~~~ " with a flourish.

Pi is no more likely to send the text than he is to send his mother those drunken cell phone pictures of his penis.

A second after he presses send Pi stares at his phone in horror.

this whole section is love.

Pi can feel the rabbit-race flutter of Kame's pulse under his thumb.
i really like this description.

These days trying to understand Kame is like trying to climb a glass mountain, and there are shards all the way down.
i predictably like this one a lot too.

Stupid clumsy children battering their way through life with no heed to consequences or the things they break and leave behind. Loud when they are angry; cruel when they don't care enough not to be; and malicious because it gets them their way.
this explanation/description is made of win.

"Oi! Factory manager! We have to pick up the speed!" Koki roars into the mike, and KAT-TUN dissolves into chuckles as their coach looks at them as if they're insane.
i like this for the image of KAT-TUN

like a butterfly in a forest fire.
for the image and
It always amazes Jin to see how Kame can get twice as panicked as everyone else in half the time.
for the idk the conciseness of the line.

2000 yen worth of gourmet cream puffs
so like, one and a half.

trying to figure out what an acceptably friendly personal space distance was on a twin-size with a past friend, current traumatic sex buddy.
XDDDDDDDD that probably shouldn't be as funny as it is. but i like to laugh at people's pain.

Kame has his Brave Little Toaster face on;
WIN! i also liked the bit about it being hard to avoid someone when you're both trapped on the same bus, but how they manage anyway.
15th-Jul-2008 02:05 am (UTC)
thank you for the detailed comment! I'll try to repay in kind....

I love it when people let me know what bits worked/didn't work or what lines they liked. Especially since you liked some of the lines that I almost took out entirely or beat my head on.

the salaryman quote I pulled out and put back in so many times b/c I though it was awk, etc.

Thanks agains so much!

<3


15th-Jul-2008 02:07 am (UTC)
I really loved this fic. ♥
10th-Jul-2008 01:07 pm (UTC)
oh my god, the Akamepi dynamics. *_* I. I just loved everything about this. I have so many favourite lines that I can't choose. *_*
15th-Jul-2008 02:05 am (UTC)
thanks you!

*blushes*

I like your icon!
11th-Jul-2008 04:27 am (UTC)
I read this today, and was blown away by it.

someone above as quoted all the parts I like too and it's just ;alskdj;aslkdja;lskdjas *__________* Beautiful. Need to reread.
15th-Jul-2008 02:06 am (UTC)
thank you so much!

I'm glad you liked you!

: )
9th-Feb-2011 01:52 am (UTC)
This is so wonderful!
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